So I’m restructuring chapter 3. Too much introspection? Could very well be.
But I found this sentence:
Shaking her head, her hair flailing about as she chastised herself. Jas sure had managed to get under her in a hell of a hurry.
Guess what I left out?
It should be “Jas sure had managed to get under her skin in a hell of a hurry! Sheesh, I’m not writing erotica for crying out loud! This is what happens when I write at 2 a.m.